Story :: Rubicon

I’ve not been well for the last couple of weeks, so my writing has suffered. I keep finding that I start stories for the Write-in, then I can’t find an ending or I don’t have the energy to type up and edit them. But now that I’m feeling a bit better I’ve forced myself to make the effort!

RubiconΒ (123 words)

The thing that was not quite Chloe looked in through the bedroom window.

She had wedged herself against the old, rusted fire escape. If the room’s occupants looked over they would see her clearly, but both seemed distracted. The breeze touched her skin and she realised with a shock how warm she was. Used to her synthetic body, its auto-cooling systems, the new bodily sensations overwhelmed her. Particularly unsettling was the churning in her stomach, the sickness in her throat. She knew it was due to the other woman who was touching Sam inside that bedroom. She wasn’t sure why.

Chloe dried her face on her sleeve and pulled the hammer out of her bag. It was too late to turn back now.

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Sequel to ClosureΒ and Apathy.

Written for the CAKE.shortandsweet Wednesday Write-in. Β Read my other free stories here.

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About sarahgracelogan

Sarah Grace is an itinerant scribbler and general layabout. She runs a writing group called CAKE.shortandsweet, because any form of procrastination from actual writing is always attractive to the serious author of refined taste. When not distracted by laser pens, Sarah Grace writes novels, short stories and flash fiction, poetry, stage scripts and screenplays. She has performed her work at Stirred Poetry, Bad Language and Tongue in Cheek Manchester. Her first publication, Humping the Boonies is a self-published chapbook available directly from the author, or from Travelling Man, Manchester. You can find more details about her ongoing projects, not to mention a selection of free stories up for grabs right here on her blog. https://sarahgracelogan.wordpress.com/about/ She also likes to talk about theatre, film, books, photography, and especially games and other things that involve collaborative storytelling. Sarah Grace likes feedback, in whatever form it comes.

16 comments

  1. I love this. Well done. To write it while not feeling 100% well is an even more impressive achievement! It’s chilling, cool, macabre, clever and gripping.

    • Haha thanks, it was a very quick scribble so I’m glad to hear it works πŸ™‚ I feel like I just keep chipping away at this story from different angles without really getting to the centre – maybe I should make it my NaNo task!

  2. If this is you on a bad day then I think you need to be ill far more often.

    This is really good. So many questions about it I would want answering πŸ™‚

    • Oh god, I think I’m ill enough! But thank you though πŸ™‚ I’m enjoying these characters – I need to make some time to jump in properly and explore it instead of peeking in through tiny windows.

  3. Tessa Sheppard

    The last line made me realize what was going on, and what was about to happen. The suspense! Great job. πŸ™‚

  4. Elaine McKay

    What a great opening line! The new sensations are beautifully described. A ‘ hammer ‘pretty much says it all!
    I really liked this one.

  5. Ooh great ending! Well done really intriguing and well written! The idea of the synthetic body is really interesting! Looking forward to rereading ‘closure’ and ‘apathy’ now! Well done- hope you feel better soon!

  6. Elaine Peters

    Especially like the first line. More please!

  7. I’m all admiration for the wonderful way each of your sentences is more than the sum of its parts. That really makes your work engaging, and gets the old grey matter going.

    • Thanks! To be honest I feel like I need to sit down and work on writing something a bit longer. After you get the hang of them, these short-short pieces can get a bit formulaic πŸ™‚

      • Great minds and all that… The same thought was just starting to crawl into the back of my mind. Words…mind map… characters…happy ending (in my case. I’m a sucker for ending on a positive!) I think I will try for a 3,000-4,000 word competition piece next. The London Magazine has one this month.

      • Ohh yeah I saw that, was thinking of writing something πŸ™‚ We should have a monthly challenge to submit something!

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